By A.E. Bayne
The journey remains today,
our minds less on goods than
last, last, last.
This nation’s standing unpleasant
time has passed.
We be
the state of the economy.
We are not undiminished standing interests,
or passed off goods;
No work needed,
or last picked decisions.
Everywhere, work will build the new lines;
and we will, we will
meet the new soil;
and we will, we will
state the foundation of
rightful wonders and rightful place.
Narrow again we remake the journey.
Prosperous,
we will restore the digital Earth
all bold and standing,
starting,
needing rightful growth.
Our selves restored,
to begin the work of America.
Observation 72
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4 comments:
Oh, nice revision. Such a good feel to what you wrote. Love it.
Thanks! I like the way it came out too. I can't take much credit for the tone, as I think this experiment proves that the words one chooses (Obama's speech writers here) really set the overall tone of a piece of writing. I had some small part of keeping that tone with the way I combined the words, but their power really came out of his speech. I think the poem captures that. Success!
I like the strength and hope of this piece; thanks, Amy. I've posted a new poemette on my page, if you'd like to take a gander.
My word veri: ovence--Just add the "Pro" and your whole world will change
Thanks!
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